EVER SINCE BART CAME FROM THE FUTURE THINGS HAVE BEEN HARD. BART HAS SEEN HIS GRANDFATHER HOWEVER HE LOOKS OLD ENOUGH TO BE BART’S BROTHER. BARRY ALLEN WAS HIS GRANDFATHER HOWEVER YOU MIGHT KNOW HIM AS THE FLASH. BART NOW HAS TO TAKE THE NEW MANTLE OF KID FLASH EVER SINCE THE TRAGIC DEATH OF WALLY WEST (FORMER KID FLASH).
SUDDENLY HIS PHONE STARTS RINGING, THERE WAS NO CALLER ID. BART ANSWERED THE PHONE AND STRAIGHT AWAY HE DROPPED HIS PHONE. A VOICE SAID ” COME CATCH ME IF YOU CAN, YOU DO NOT WANT ME TO KILL ROY DO YOU. MEET ME AT CENTRAL CITY DOCKS, WE’LL BE WAITING” BART RACED OVER THERE IN A FLASH AND THERE HE WAS BART’S EVIL EARTH 2 DUPLICATE OR REVERSE KID FLASH. BART SAW ROY (RED ARROW) ON THE FLOOR BLEEDING BAD. REVERSE KID FLASH RAN AND DRAGGING ROY ALONG WITH HIM, THEY RAN ALL THE WAY TO STAR CITY. REVERSE KID FLASH WAS SMILING WITH THE MOST EVILEST GRIN AND GOT ROY, THEN CUT HIS ARM CLEAN OFF HIS BODY, BLOOD WAS EVERYWHERE.
BART WAS FILLED WITH RAGE, HE GOT REVERSE KID FLASH TOOK HIM TO A WASTE LAND FAR AWAY, RUNNING FASTER THAN THE SPEED OF LIGHT BART STOPPED AND THREW HIM IN THE CENTER. KID FLASH WAS RUNNING BACK TO CENTRAL CITY THEN TURNED AROUND. INSTEAD OF BLOODSHOT EYES HIS EYES WERE FILLED WITH LIGHTNING HE RAN SO FAST THAT HE BROKE EVERY GLASS HE RAN PAST AND MADE EVERYBODY THINK THERE WAS A WIND STORM. BART ARRIVED AND HIT REVERSE KID FLASH WITH A SUPER SONIC PUNCH AND KNOCKED HIM OUT COLD. HE GOT UP AND SAID ” IT IS NOT THAT EASY TO GET RID OF ME”
December 6, 2015 at 2:02 pm
An interesting setting here Nayim that we need to develop further. Follow the targets below to improve your story and work towards the genre writing badge.
1) Focus first on describing the setting of your story. Make sure that your reader can see the place the story is happening in their heads.
Use a wider range of figurative language (similes, metaphors, personification etc) in order to help create an image for your reader.
2) Try and create some tension by building up to dramatic moments through the tension techniques that we’ve discussed in class.
3) Don’t rush to cover too many events in the story. You will lose the reader’s interest if you list things off. Cover a few and in detail.
Good start and I look forward to seeing how this develops.